WORDINESS

Wordiness

Wordiness

Exercise-1 Write the shorter version of the following sentences.

1. The examination was finished by all the students within the allocated time.
2. The professor, who was tall and blond, lectured about medieval architecture.
3. Paul read Jane’s letter in an exited state of mind.
5. The committee discussed the problem for a long time without being able to come to
the point where a decision could be reached.
5. Crime and illegal acts are on the rise.
6. The girl who was wearing the colorful bathing suit is my cousin.
7. The glass figurine that was on display in the store window appealed to me.
8. Boston, which is the capital of Massachusetts, has many universities and colleges.
9. He walked down the stairs in a quick manner.
10. The young girl who is waiting by the door would like to see you.

Ex-1

1. All the students finished the examination in time.
2. The tall, blond professor lectured about medieval architecture.
3. Paul excitedly read Jane’s letter.
4. The committee discussed the problem for a long time without reaching a decision.
5. Crime is on the rise.
6. The girl wearing the colorful bathing suit is my cousin.
7. The glass figurine on display in the store window appealed to me.
8. Boston, the capital of Massachusetts, has many universities and colleges.
9. He walked down the stairs quickly.
10. The young girl waiting by the door would like to see you.

Wordiness

Exercise-2

Define which sentences seem wordy.

1. The man indicated a negative response by shaking his head.
2. The house will probably be finished in four months.
3. The house on the corner burned down last night.
4. Jane went to the store with the purpose of selecting and purchasing a new dress.
5. Running on foot through the street, the thief was apprehended by the police.
6. My wife and I argued for hours before deciding to send our son to summer camp.
7. Bob saw several pieces of art that were expensive.
8. Jenny received several speeding tickets.
9. The ballerina danced her dances for hours.
10. Professor Blanton, who is the college president, will speak on this topic.
11. Betty opened the mysterious package cautiously.
12. The saleswoman in the red dress insulted me.
13. Three hours, was the length of time that we found necessary to drive to New York.
14. The Louvr is, a world-famous art museum, in Paris, France.
15. The book was read by me in four hours.

Ex-2

1. The man shook his head/The man said no.
2.
3.
4. Jane went to the store to buy a new dress.
5. Running through the street, the thief was apprehended by the police.
6.
7. Bob saw several expensive pieces of art
8.
9. The ballerina danced for hours.
10. Professor Blanton, the college president, will speak on this topic.
11.
12.
13. It took us three hours to drive to new York.
14.
15. I read the book in four hours.

Wordiness

Good writing requires fewer words, not more. To get a higher score on the IELTS or TOEFL, you need to say as much as possible within a limited number of words. In this essay, we look at how to avoid wordiness and redundancy by writing tighter sentences. Use the 9 tools provided to make your writing better.

 

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